Thursday, January 19, 2012

fatal night


deep in the night lights
rise and fall, convulsing clouds
fill the sky with death's

blighted breath, my heart
thrills, my blood fails and leaves me
undone, breathless and

blind, 'till in the dark
your eyes ignite and lift me 
out of fatal night.
Posted by Steven Federle at 7:24 PM

6 comments:

  1. magical transformation in the last stanza, well done.

    :)

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  2. man or man... wow! I don't even know what to say? ... seriously love your choice of words to express those nouns! ;) Powerful stuff!!!
    ~L
    www.untitledmoments.com

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  3. Some very powerful writing here. Great stuff!

    Here is my entry: http://www.jackedwardspoetry.blogspot.com/2011/12/sorry-performance-poem.html

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  4. Certainly keeps to the depth this does. Succinct but complete!

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  5. short and precise descriptions.
    well done.

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  6. short and sweet - love the expression and emotions expressed in such few words. Wonderful!

    Here's mine for the rally: http://cursemymetalbody.wordpress.com/2012/01/19/poetry-thursday-74/

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